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    What came before the waking?
    And what came before the dusk?
    If the world continues to keep braking
    what will become of us?
    It's not as though we have a choice
    to listen to one another or follow the
    sound of another's voice.

    I don't think we don't think.
    I don't think we even blink
    at the thought of what we've got
    or is it what we have or have not?

    How then do we make this work?

    Did we forget it doesn't need us for it to work?

    Did we even know that after all?

    Do we really understand?

    It's not ours to do with as we wish
    we aren't all just a drift like a school of fish.

    If you turn then I turn too,
    and if I turn then you turn
    that's just what we do
    you go your way and I go mine too
    But eventually we run out of room and we run out of time.

    Where does it end?

    Where does it my friend?


I don't speak from experience on everything I write
and sometimes I do.
However this is an odd combination of concerns
that most have dwelt upon and maybe not in this exact
way, thought, or style but, the over all generalization is here and there in a kind of disparaging kind of way.

This was just a summing up of many thoughts had or yet to be had.

And if you think that this is a poem, please let me know (really)
since I seem to get caught up in a rhythmic tone/pattern
and sometimes I'm really unsure myself if it really is poetic or not.

I hope you like it.
Thank you for the views, faves, and comments.:heart:

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Pukachi Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
I find it rather poetic. Poetry to me is pretty much just some of what's on a person's mind and their inner feelings at most times. Other times, poetry can be just for fun randomonia.
This is really awesome I like ^ ^
bigchucker Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It doesn't!

... and everything is.

This is why it's important to live.
kewltashigirl Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm surprised that I actually kind of got this.
Also, just to let you know, I thought this was a poetic piece at first, mostly because of the rhyming.
But I really, really like it. :clap:
bebefromtheblock Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012   Photographer
goRillA-iNK Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Exactly! :XD:

That title alone is enough to provoke some heads to being scratched.
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